Teachers Write
Good Morning!
Today I started a “camp” for teachers and writers. I posted some of my writing to get feedback. Oh my goodness, it’s scary to ask other teachers and published authors what they think of your writing. I did it. That’s good. I submitted the beginning of a fiction story and I really struggle with writing fiction. The feedback I’m getting is good, but it can be hard to hear. The reason I’m doing this is to become a better writer. If you’d like to comment, I’d welcome your feedback as well. Does this hook you? What works? What doesn’t work? Here’s my writing:
On a cool Monday morning in late September, the sun streams in as Miss Leone enjoys the silence and a cup of coffee. Soon, students will be pouring into the doors of Stapler Academy and straight to Room 229.
The bell rings and sixth graders fill the halls. Their laughter reverberates around the locker bay while they gather their supplies for the first block of the day. Miss Leone takes a deep breath, ready to greet her first block.
“Good morning everyone, how are you?” inquired Miss Leone.
In the front row sat Jack and he began everyday peeking through his brown bangs to looking for his new adventure. Jack smiled as Miss Leone asked the question because she was the kind of teacher who really wanted to know. He thought, this is going to be a good day.
Miss Leone nodded, “It will be a good day today.”
Weird, Jack thought, I didn’t say anything out loud. Hmmm? Miss Leone ignored Jack’s confused expression and continued walking through the maze of desks and checking in with the sixth graders.